budhiprayitno12, I think your story has potential but needs some improvement. I've got a few suggestions, and if you give them a try, I'd be happy to remove this flag.
Your story needs more information - a single sentence is rarely sufficient detail for a news story, and particularly for a discussion topic like this. You might also want to consider providing links to other sources of information.
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at 23:26 on August 20th, 2007
budhiprayitno12, I think your story has potential but needs some improvement. I've got a few suggestions, and if you give them a try, I'd be happy to remove this flag.
Your story needs more information - a single sentence is rarely sufficient detail for a news story, and particularly for a discussion topic like this. You might also want to consider providing links to other sources of information.
Please review What Makes News News. It can really help if you follow the old "W5" news formula -- making sure you have answered the questions: Who? What? Where? When? And Why? (You might want to check out our J-Tips for more help.)