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IT WAS TWO O'CLOCK ON A BEAUTIFUL SUNNY SPRING AFTERNOON, I HAD BEEN DOING THE HOUSEWORK FROM SEVEN THIRTY THAT MORNING WHEN MY HUSBAND AND SON LEFT TO GO FISHING. THIS WAS HOW I SPENT MY WEEKENDS.SHOPPING ,COOKING AND CLEANING WERE MY ONLY REAL CONCERNS. VERY OFTEN I WOULD STILL BE CLEANING WHEN THEY RETURNED AT NIGHT. MY SON FREQUENTLY TOLD ME I NEEDED A HOBBY TO HAVE SOMETHING ELSE TO OCCUPY MY MIND. I THINK IT WAS TO PROTECT HIMSELF AS WELL.HE HATED TIDYING HIS ROOM AND I USUALLY CLEARED IT FOR HIM, LOSING MOST OF HIS TREASURED JUNK IN THE PROCESS. HE WAS RIGHT, I DID NEED SOMETHING ELSE TO DO BUT NOTHING KEPT ME INTERESTED FOR LONG. MY HOME CAME TO MEAN A LOT TO ME AS I NEVER REALLY HAD A PERMANENT HOME. ALL THEIR MARRIED LIFE MY PARENTS MOVED ON A REGULAR BASIS AND BEING THE NEW GIRL,MAKING NEW FRIENDS, BEING IN NEW SURROUNDINGS WAS ALL PART OF MY GROWING UP. I SAT DOWN TO HAVE A CUP OF COFFEE AND A QUICK READ OF THE LOCAL PAPER. I NOTICED AN ADVERTISEMENT FOR RIDING LESSONS AT A YARD NOT FAR FROM WHERE I LIVED. IT HAD A CRECHE, NOT THAT I NEEDED ONE BUT IT MEANT THERE WOULD BE YOUNG MUMS THERE AND I WOULDN'T FEEL OUT OF PLACE.RIDING WAS SOMETHING I DID ENJOY BUT HADN'T DONE FOR QUITE A LONG TIME. I HAD LEARNT TO RIDE AT THIRTEEN. I HELPED MUCK OUT IN EXCHANGE FOR LESSONS. MY DAD HAD FIXED UP THE DEAL FOR ME WITH ONE OF THE CUSTOMERS AT HIS STORE. FORTUNATELY THIS YOUNG WOMAN HAD TWO COMPETITION HORSES AND WE RODE OUT TOGETHER MANY TIMES. I OFTEN SCARED THE LIFE OUT OF MY MOTHER TELLING HER OF OUR EXPLOITS! THIS WAS WHEN I FIRST EXPERIENCED BEING 'RUN AWAY WITH' . A KIND WAY OF SAYING I WAS OUT OF CONTROL!! THE SPEED DIDN'T REALLY BOTHER ME, IT WAS EXHILARATING, BUT I WAS YOUNG. I DECIDED TO RING AND MAKE AN APPOINTMENT FOR THE FOLLOWING WEEK. ONE MORNING I HAD ARRIVED LATE TO DISCOVER THEY HAD ALL GONE OUT WITHOUT ME AND THERE STOOD WARREN, A SMALL GREY, PATIENTLY WAITING FOR ME TO TAKE HIM OUT WITH THE GANG. THE OWNER SAID I COULD CATCH UP IF I HURRIED......THIS MEANT I WOULD BE RIDING OUT ALONE FOR THE FIRST TIME EVEN IF IT WAS ONLY A MILE OR SO. THRILLED AT THE PROSPECT, OFF WE WENT TO CATCH THE REST. RIDING OUT BY MYSELF WAS SOMETHING I LONGED TO DO. TO GO WHERE I WANTED, WHEN I WANTED AND FOR HOW LONG I WANTED.... JUST WONDERFUL. SO THE SHORT RIDE ALONE I HAD WITH WILLING WARREN GAVE ME A TASTE OF WHAT IT WOULD BE LIKE. | ||||
WE MADE ARRANGEMENTS TO GO AND SEE THIS HORSE THE VERY NEXT EVENING. IAN WOULD RIDE IT AND SHOW ME WHAT IT WAS LIKE. THE OWNER CAME TOO AND CALLED TO JAMIE OVER FIELDS STRETCHING FOR WHAT SEEMED LIKE MILES AND MILES. OUT OF THE DISTANCE HE CAME,STONES AND DUST FLYING. HE WAS PERFECT, HE WAS BEAUTIFUL., HE GALLOPED FASTER THAN I HAD EVER SEEN AND IT LOOKED OUT OF THIS WORLD. I DIDN'T REALISE HOW MANY FAULTS ONE HORSE COULD HAVE AND AT THAT TIME DIDN'T REALLY CARE. HE STOOD QUIETLY WHILE HE GOT TACKED UP AND IAN MOUNTED AND WALKED HIM TOWARDS THE GATE. HIS FATHER PATTED JAMIES'S BUM GENTLY AS HE WALKED PAST. JAMIE BUCKED AND DEPOSITED IAN ON THE GROUND OF COURSE IT WAS FATHER'S FAULT, WHAT A SILLY THING TO DO PAT A HORSE!! IN MY EXCITEMENT I DIDN'T HEAR THE WARNING BELLS, IN MY IGNORANCE, I THOUGHT IT WAS A ONE OFF.... IT WOULD MAKE NO DIFFERENCE, I AM A VERY DETERMINED WEE SOUL WHEN I MAKE UP MY MIND. THE NEXT NIGHT I WOULD TACK UP AND RIDE MYSELF.JAMIE STOOD WELL TO BE TACKED UP AND PATIENTLY WAITED UNTIL I MANAGED TO GET THE BRIDLE OVER HIS EARS. I AM QUITE A SHORT PERSON AND IT HAD BEEN A LONG TIME SINCE I HAD DONE ANYTHING LIKE THIS MYSELF.. I MANAGED TO GET UP AND WALK OVER TO THE FLAT PART OF THE FIELD. WE WALKED AND TROTTED BUT COULDN'T QUITE GET THE CANTER. JAMIE DECIDED HE DIDN'T WANT TO DO IT AND I SAID OK.THIS BECAME THE PATTERN OF HOW JAMIE AND I GOT ON. IF HE FELT STRONGLY ENOUGH ABOUT NOT WANTING TO DO ANYTHING WE DIDN'T DO IT.... AT FIRST. I RODE HIM A FEW TIMES UNTIL ONE NIGHT WE DISCOVERED HE HAD BADLY OVER REACHED AND CUT HIS FOOT. HE HAD TO BE SEDATED WHILE IT WAS SEWN UP AND I COULDN'T RIDE HIM AS HE BECAME LAME. WHEN HE IMPROVED ARRANGEMENT WERE MADE TO MOVE HIM TO THE STABLES I HAD BEEN LUCKY ENOUGH TO FIND.THE OWNER TOLD US THE TRAILER WOULDN'T BE AVAILABLE AFTER ALL AND HE WOULD LEAD JAMIE TO HIS NEW HOME, A DISTANCE OF SEVERAL MILES.... THE BELLS SHOULD HAVE BEEN RINGING AGAIN, BUT I WAS OBLIVIOUS.
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