gambir, I think your story has potential but needs some improvement. I've got a few suggestions, and if you give them a try, I'd be happy to remove this flag.
I wasnt sure what was newsworthy in this story. News should always be about posting current stuff - new things you've discovered.
Please review What Makes News News. It can really help ify ou follow the old "W5" news formula -- making sure you have answered the questions: Who? What? Where? When? And Why? (You might want to check out our J-Tips for more help.)





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at 02:00 on January 6th, 2009
I think this should be in the style section instead of world. you might get more readers if you would put your stories in the right section since world cycles so fast plus it would just be more appropriate.
at 02:24 on January 6th, 2009
ok thanks
at 02:28 on January 6th, 2009
Sure thing!