Cailyn, I think your story has potential but needs some improvement.
I wasnt sure what was newsworthy in this story.
Please review What Makes News News. It can really help if you follow the old "W5" news formula -- making sure you have answered the questions: Who? What? Where? When? And Why? (You might want to check out our J-Tips for more help.)
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at 09:10 on March 22nd, 2008
Cailyn, I think your story has potential but needs some improvement.
I wasnt sure what was newsworthy in this story.
Please review What Makes News News. It can really help if you follow the old "W5" news formula -- making sure you have answered the questions: Who? What? Where? When? And Why? (You might want to check out our J-Tips for more help.)
at 10:38 on March 22nd, 2008
thanks Jordan. i will repair it again